Wednesday

Lance

Lance submitted a newer blog that has some direction issues. Planning has alot to offer to a blog if you do it before you write your posts. Long lists like the "Sunday Stupid 33" or the dialog post you have further down makes the blog too overwhelming. Short and simple is a good rule of thumb. I get the feeling that you couldn't think of what to write that day so you threw up the long list. Also you added photos to that list that makes it even longer and makes it harder to load the page. Your writing is good and passionate which is made evident in your letter to your son Aden. So although this critique wasn't the most positive I hope that you take it as constructive criticism and keep the blogging ball rolling!

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